Book about gamers

[SERIOUSLY THOUGH]

(02-17-2013 08:09 PM)T.H.E.E. Wrote:  @SERIOUSLY, there are only like 3-4 long sentences in the book. I know this because a proofreading software told me that it needed dots in order to check the stuff properly, haha.

(02-17-2013 08:09 PM)T.H.E.E. Wrote:  3-4 long sentences in the book. I know this because a proofreading software told me that it needed dots in order to

(02-17-2013 08:09 PM)T.H.E.E. Wrote:  the book. I know this because a proofreading software told me that it needed

(02-17-2013 08:09 PM)T.H.E.E. Wrote:  proofreading software

But before I do so, just remember this golden rule (advice from a sentient proofreading humanoid) - If your sentence goes above twenty words and three clauses, be very careful you're not losing the reader. Without a full stop, readers naturally keep the sentence's information in their head. If the sentence goes on and on, the brain has to strain to keep all of that info in its short term memory. That could lead to reading becoming more than just a relaxing way to wind down.
Your first page has six sentences. Four of them hit that limit. Don't hesitate to cut your sentences up.

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