Shameless Self Promotion.

[Gardocki]

(10-30-2012 08:26 PM)Ouberry_13 Wrote:  Not really sure how tempting it could possibly be, but whatever.
Bear in mind, this is still a work-in-progress, but please, critique it all you like. All comments are welcome. Even comments saying I suck at writing, which I do. The only reason I'm even writing the book is to finally prove to myself I can fully complete at least one life goal.

"...And I ran, desperately trying to distance myself from those creatures. Those things. But, no matter how fast I ran, I could still hear their screams right behind me, still feel their breath rolling down my spine.
My common sense fogged by my fear, I darted into an alley, thinking I could lose them. Surveying the area as quickly as I could, I saw a dark blue dumpster, its side ruined by rust.
Hearing those creatures coming closer, I jumped in. Not the best idea I've ever had, but certainly up on the top ten list. The smell was absolutely horrendous, like an old refrigerator that was full of 2 week old food had been left out in the hot summer sun. The smell was so bad, my eyes were stinging with tears, and my throat was seizing up, trying to prevent me from breathing in the noxious fumes.
Just when I thought I would choke on this toxic gas, the dumpster opened once more, and I was puled out by my shirt collar..."

So, yea...not the best thing anyone's ever read, and hopefully not the worst. Again, any comment is welcome.

And with that....I wanna read more (AKA very nice work friendo).